I Feel A lil’Freddie

with the simplest touch

im on stage

feeling the rush

blood flowing

to my head

then the body’s going numb

which is nothing much

then a  sign

that im

on my way going up

and there’s nothing that

anything else can give, to make anything else enough

to be equal to because no equivalence

can never ever match up

to an amazing grace

that can only come from up above

that good that pure

that holy stuff

  1. fun word play, cheers.


  2. Interesting references in this one.

    • Bupinder Singh
    • November 16th, 2011

    fun words.. i felt like u were up on a stage performance…


  3. beautiful.

  4. awesome!

  5. A very good poem. The structure perfect. Short lines create tension and expectation. Nice.

  6. mesmerizing poem….the feeling of being on high, spiritually.
    interesting wordplay here in a metaphorical sense — religious ecstasy and the performers stage.

    fun piece and a good work.

  7. Mr Mercury would have loved this, as do I. 🙂

  8. Great energy. Definitely transfers the energy from the stage to the words.

  9. I was once told that the stage is a great big sandbox for adults. You’ve captured that feeling.
    Mark Butkus

    • Janaki Nagaraj
    • November 21st, 2011

    Nice. Felt the high.

  10. Loved the flow of this piece … 🙂 Enjoyed it!

  1. November 21st, 2011

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